Yes, I remember how I met with Holden. It was a cold December day, and I was walking in the part. I saw a guy with a red hunting cap on who looked alot like Holden Caulfield. When I got closer i noticed that I was correct with my conjecture. I thought it was a unlikely recurrence for me to see him again but there it happened. It was a really spontaneous thing to happen and I was shocked to see him. We talked about old timed. He was a really, lonely boy.
He asked me how everything was (family, friends, life, school.) He seemed quite affable now. He asked me if I'd care to have a drink with him. I responded: Of Course. After a few minutes we arrived at the coffe shop. He ordered a scotch while I ordered a beer. I remember how his childhood was. It was getting really late and I knew if I told him I had to go he would get mad and sad. Holden, who is a avid drinker, is also a avid smoker. He got drunk so fast that he couldn't notice I was there. Finally I succumbed and said: I really need to go. After I said that he seemed really tremulous and begged me not to go. 1 more hour I told him.
He made me feel really sad. I am as you probably noticed, very irascable. He tried to encompass me in any way to talk about my sex life but I said: Thats really personal! He asked me now how my grades were, but he sured did that in an amiss matter. Fine. I answered. I felt pretty nervous to stay with him, but his entreaty made me stay. He was really resilient I can tell. He started talking about his family. If I remember he had 3 siblings. Phoebe, Allie, and D.B. Why was he resilient? Because his young brother, Allie died when he was only 13 years old. He told me how he still haunts him but that he is over it. He was a really intelligent, lovely boy. I can remember back in school how reclusive Holden was. He always asked me stuff like: Will you, Vigan, do my Homework for me. I always did, because his disposition was always sad.
I was really feeling dehydrated from my last beer, so I ordered another one. Holden ordered another scotch. The smell of smoke pervaded through the coffe shop. I asked him if he could stop but my endeavor failed. Finally, I was getting quite mad because he drank and smoked so much he wasnt even able to talk anymore.
Good Bye I said. And there goes another encounter with Holden Caulfield.
That was such a sad conversation :(. I liked the story plot and how you used the words, but you might wanna go back and revise your words and spelling. I also liked how you mentioned Allie and his siblings. Great work!
ReplyDeleteGreat story Vigan! I like how aside from working on putting in vocabulary, you also practiced some of the new comma usage tecniques. :)
ReplyDeleteIt was a good story, but you should check your grammar. You have some spelling mistakes and you are missing a couple commas. Other than that, great encounter with Holden!
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